Antigone Cadmus

This is pretty good, if not a bit cliche. June (Springrain) has already pointed out spelling errors. I agree, the ending is a bit abrupt. Another thing: The word "relationship" ...

Oooh, chapter three is up! Hey, you have less and less errors every time! Critique: Heh, that was the moment when I decided to write this book, despite it taking ...

Critique of the story: Honestly, what was the point of this? Are you going to post more, or is this it? Absolutely nothing happened. There was no plot or anything. ...

Yay! A horror story! Just a little critique: " You know what's weird?," Derrik asked, "He died yesterday and his mother said that's the last website he was on before ...

This is miles better than the first piece I read by you. It's very long... let's see how far I get... First of all. Communism? In Germany? Nah-uh. Germany was ...

Welcome to YWS! It's a great place to get critique for your writing, but you should critique other's writing as well! There is a 2:1 ratio- you should have 2 ...

I agree with Ygaron. The molar thing was... weird. The way you write the cat's feelings is very creative and realistic. My only worry is it might become repetitive because ...

Wow, Vox. This is really powerful. You are a very talented writer. Just a few spelling errors. commiting suicide, fear of blassemphy Should be: committing suicide, fear of blasphemy Yeah. ...

Hey, Ducati! “Asha, Oh my God, this party is the best party I’ve ever been too . It’s crazy!” A few grammar issues here. 1. Don't capitalize "oh". 2. Incorrect ...

This is a pretty good start. Rose and Scorpius? Ech. Is this going into some Romeo and Juliet thingy? The summer, it transpired was not the blast she had envisioned. ...

Wow. This is really good. You're style of writing is gorgeous. Just a few little things to critique: I felt thrilled. Rejuvenated. Weak. Powerful. I really like this line, but ...

As promised! I laughed. Once again, your story starts out with a boring sentence. Like I told you last time, anybody can laugh. How does your character laugh? What makes ...

Ah. So there is a whole article. :) Critique: It seems to me Maybe it's just my personal opinion, but this is waaaaaay to casual for a beginning. At least ...

This is a good start. Is this just the introduction? If it is, post the rest. If it is the whole article, it needs a lot of work. You never ...

Um, thanks for sharing? Last paragraph seems kind of TMI... maybe you should up the rating to "R". o.O. I didn't know this was about your sex life. o.O The ...